Can you guess

This week we had to write a story on someone we knew but not anyone who lives with us the succes critera was to write about there face, skin, hair, action and there talking I hope you enjoy my story and try guess who it is

She has wrinkled, dried up skin with a slight tan and does a range of voluntary work at starship ward B. The wrinkles don't show she's 80 at all. Her wrinkled face shows she's aging every day of her life.

Her thick black and grey hair is really thick. Although her hair is mostly black there are some traces of white throughout her hair. As she walks her hair shines in the sunlight through the hospital windows at starship. her

Her red lips highlight her face and sit neatly under her blue eyes and lovely smile.  Her small glasses  glimmer in sunshine.  Her white shiny teeth show she brushes. Her scruffy eyebrows darken her face. Her ears pick up any sound  

Her high pitched voice is noticed anywhere in the starship hospital. She engages you to into what  she's saying or doing.Her funny sense of humour is noticed threw out starship ward B. her interesting talks brighten up darkest of dull days at starship hospital.

Her way of moving is unique slow but unique because of her wadle she does sometimes to get from A to B. Her laugh makes you really happy in dull days . Her amazing way to talk to heart families like us is so special when you go there tough times like this it's good to know you  have someone like her by your side to get you thru the horrible days.

Morres Reserve Cricket

I am learning to write a piece of prose-  a sketch with detailed words, about a particular place, that is very important to me

I know I have achieved this when I can describe this sketch of the place,in specific detail. To do this I need to:

• Use specific nouns
• Activate the nouns with strong verbs

It's the little things in life ...

A cricket pitch

Morres Reserve Cricket

Many wickets collapsing in the top order as a hot Summer's day drifts on.

Bales tumbling while wickets falling in the fired up game

Batters decimating the run rate and total score they created a good total

Fielders absolutely amaze the crowd with their outstanding boundary savers  and efforts.

Bowlers eliminating everything in their path to get the much needed win.

Creased lines smudging  as the batters and bowlers get more anticipated for the win.

Supporters supporting on the  sideline their fellow teams and great efforts by others.

Vehicle owners moving their cars away  after hearing the upcoming bet on who can hit the furtherest..

My chosen place - the cricket pitch

Cricket pitch

I am learning to write a piece of prose-  a sketch with detailed words, about a particular place, that is very important to me

I know I have achieved this when I can describe this sketch of the place,in specific detail. To do this I need to:

• Use specific nouns
• Activate the nouns with strong verbs

It's the little things in life

My chosen place - cricket pitch

Many wickets collapsing in the top order as a hot Summer's day drifts on.

Bales tumbling while wickets falling in the fired up game

Batters decimating the run rate and total score they created a good total

Fielders absolutely amaze the crowd with their outstanding boundary savers  and efforts.

Bowlers eliminating everything in their path to get the much needed win.

Creased lines smudging  as the batters and bowlers get more anticipated for the win.

Supporters supporting on the  sideline their fellow teams and great efforts by others.

Vehicle owners  moving cars back,  after hearing the upcoming bet on who can hit the furtherest..

My chosen place - the cricket pitch

My Memior Poem

I am learning to write a memoir poem. (This recalls a moment in time from my past that links to an emotion I felt at that time) The emotion I have chosen to link my memoir to is….

In my memoir I describe the scene and situation using strong adjective, nouns and verbs.

I hope you enjoy it.

The cricket game was exciting enough

Numerous Kids worrying

A tribe of irritating Townies complaining [as usual ]

The hardened pitch moisturized by the speed of the ball

a lot of tension from both Clubs at boiling point

Ignorant Supporters lying [Boys High]

Bored Umpires arrogance- rising

We did what any good team would do

We rose to the challenge- and won

Amazed, elated, wondering

Can we do it next time ?

Doing something important.

The boy in the stripped pyjamas memoir poem

Yesterday we watched the Boy In The Stripped Pyjamas. the success criteria was We had to choose a part in the movie to write a memoir poem about. I chose to write about the backyard scene because in my perspective the back yard scene was the best because he made the really fast swing. I hope you enjoy my poem

The swing was big enough

It was powerful strong and had surrounds of stones

Speedy swing was swinging

Massive fence guarding

Noisy trucks arriving with horrendous numbers of  innocent Jews  

Bloody leg aching really badly

Running man worrying for Bruno

Swinging so fast like lightning

For my joy, and  happiness